Writing Update

Change of plan. As hinted at, I’ve rewritten the opening two chapters of the story. First one considerably, second has been tightened up in terms of consistent characterisation.

Ryso’s introduction had too much world building in it. Not enough conflict or establishment of what she was about. You should now get a stronger view that she’s been up to something. Something big. Something that’s demanded a lot from her. And that she resents being told to step back…

Callan’s chapter has also become a lot more focussed, as well as having a slight personality transplant. He was too much like Ryso in terms of taciturn, introspective and in control.  He’s now much more excited about his new job. Looks at the world around him with much more optimism. I like this new Cal. And he more quickly gets to his own inciting incident. Much more of an action introduction than with Ryso. Just as you think he’s got his shit together the world goes into a spin around him.

Both have gone from over 2.2k words long to about 1.8k each. Much better.

I’m seriously considering posting the first couple of chapters here for anyone to read…